This is one of my writing problems, but it’s hard for me to notice. The read aloud helps but I think there are areas that are just too much exposition and that is ba-aad.
For one thing, it’s telling, not showing. I’m usually able to avoid that, but I have gluts of information (as some of you may have noticed) because it's hard for me to put myself in the reader's shoes and see that whoop! they don't need to know this/I'm reciting facts/just end the damn sentence already. To compound the problem, I tend to confuse "lengthy" with "lyrical." When I try to be smooth and poetic, it ends up reading blah.
I hope you learn from my mistakes. If you come to a scene in your own WIP that bores you, it needs further scrutiny. Also a good rule of thumb: read it aloud and if you can't get the sentence out in one breath, it's too long (now to go apply this to my own work...).
Anyone have any more advice for spotting and removing information glut? How do you combat your writing flaws?
