Hi everyone from the bloghop! If you’re looking to swap beta reads/critiques and don’t detest first person present tense, I’m here.
WIP Title: COLLAPSE
Word Count (projected/actual so far): 90,000/90,000
Genre: YA Dystopian/apocalyptic
How long have you been working on it?: A little over a year.
Elevator Pitch (if you came across an agent in an elevator ride, what couple of lines would you use to summarize your book): The world is ending. Society is crumbling. Cassidy, however, isn’t going anywhere any time soon.
Brief Synopsis (250 words or less): World temperatures are sky-rocketing and society is on shaky last legs. Cassidy is witnessing it all firsthand. But she isn’t the type to let a little thing like the end of the world do her in. Of course, the life she once knew is gone, replaced with something vastly different from high school and a boring suburban life. Bullies used to be a problem for her. Now she’s slightly more worried about being gunned down by people she once called “neighbor”, and whether or not her brother will die from an asthma attack because they can’t get to a doctor. Her father says keeping the family safe at the expense of everyone else is the right thing to do and she believes him…except for the one niggle of doubt when she sees the people gasping their last breaths in triple digit temperatures. It may be a question of who breaks first, her or the heat.
Are you looking for a Critique Partner?: Yes!
Are you looking for a Beta Reader?: Also yes!
The synopsis sounds interesting, but the elevator pitch makes the book feel generic....
ReplyDeleteThey aren't my forte. I'll be sure to work on it.
DeleteEek. Triple-digit temps! I'd never last.
ReplyDeleteI like the premise, though. And I bet your snark comes through for some comedy relief. :)
I know. I'm melting and it's only 90 degrees out.
DeleteThis sounds like a very interesting premise, and your voice comes across so well when you pitch it. Great intro! Thank you for sharing with us today. :)
ReplyDeleteAw, thanks. :)
DeleteGoodness. A world about to fall to pieces? Lawlessness? This sounds like a dangerous setting for an explosive tale.
ReplyDeleteDangerous setting for an explosive tale...I like that :)
DeleteI would actually offer, but I have too much stacked up right now.
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I've really liked what I've read so far!
ReplyDeleteSounds very intriguing! I always like the concepts of dystopians, but then when I actually read them they're not my thing. So, I hope you find someone who's a great fit for a CP since this does sound like an interesting take!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the last line of your elevator pitch. It's perfect for your MC. =)
ReplyDeleteI love the premise. It has endless potenttial. and your direction makes it even more interesting.
ReplyDeleteThanks :). I hope it's as interesting as you think it is.
DeleteI hope you find some good CPs and betas.
ReplyDeleteLove the synopsis and the last line of the elevator pitch - would have me hooked :)
ReplyDeleteSuzanne @ Suzannes Tribe
Good, then I'm doing something right :)
DeleteThe book seems heavy, but your pitch and synopsis gives it some levity. I like the idea and would buy it.
ReplyDeleteGlad you think so. That's what I'm going for.
DeleteAnother YA apocalyptic like mine! Sounds really interesting and I know I'd be hating life if it got over 100 degrees all the time.
ReplyDeleteSounds scary as all hell. But sounds really good.
ReplyDeleteTim
The Other Side blog.
Thanks! I try.
DeleteI don't know why but I love apocalypse stories. I'd offer to read it but I'm totally swamped for the next month or two. Maybe after that if you still need people I can read it? :)
ReplyDeleteAnd yeah, I hate summer so this would be my true idea of hell coming to earth.
I'm sure I'll need fresh eyes for the draft after this one! Thanks for the offer :)
DeleteIt's my idea of hell, too. I'm melting just thinking about it.
Big fan of dystopian/apocalyptic stuff -- keep at it!
ReplyDeleteI certainly shall!
DeleteGreat premise!
ReplyDeleteI really like the synopsis, but I hope you don't mind me saying that you might want to work on the elevator pitch a little bit? "Cassidy isn't going anywhere" doesn't tell me much. You could move some of that fabulous internal conflict (Is it really us versus them? Is that my life now?) into the one sentence pitch to make it stand out and get to the heart of your story.
I mean, if you do end up in an elevator with an agent, you want to make it count, right? ;)
Interesting premise and it sounds like you have lots of room to write an explosive story. And I like that your female lead sounds like a kick-butt type character. Those are my favorite kind of books to read. Good luck with this!
ReplyDeleteI like that she's spunky and not going to let the end of the world do her in!
ReplyDeleteIntriguing! I'm really starting to get excited by dystopians - they're all so varied!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like an exciting read! I'm a fan of dystopians :)
ReplyDeleteSounds like a good premise!
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