tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post3764211926425151802..comments2024-03-28T14:11:02.991-04:00Comments on Still Writing: Pretty Little WordsJ E Oneilhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09780097298061829471noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post-65086422726610220412010-11-09T17:59:53.856-05:002010-11-09T17:59:53.856-05:00Oh yeah, description can make--or break--a novel. ...Oh yeah, description can make--or break--a novel. Too little and it reads dry. Too much and it gets hard to slog through. <br><br>I like your examples!!!lbdiamondhttp://lbdiamond.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post-61922707950173097872010-11-09T16:22:34.233-05:002010-11-09T16:22:34.233-05:00I agree. Description is the hardest for me, too. I...I agree. Description is the hardest for me, too. I'm glad I'm not the only one.Lizhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16531953467834426316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post-33218974052603172782010-11-08T22:29:30.265-05:002010-11-08T22:29:30.265-05:00I'm with Emy, I usually just bang it out in th...I'm with Emy, I usually just bang it out in the first draft, "telling" and all. Second and later revisions for me are for adding details, fleshing out the characters, changing to "showing", etc.<br><br>RachRachael Harriehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16764930101064527321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post-42318216863884609382010-11-08T22:16:01.285-05:002010-11-08T22:16:01.285-05:00Emy--Yes, me, too. Because I don't outline, I ...Emy--Yes, me, too. Because I don't outline, I usually focus on plot more, adding more about my characters as I go on and in the rewrite. <br><br>Melissa--I know. Actually, the first one came right out and the second took about three minutes to word. Good words take time.<br><br>Paul--good point. Audience is always a factor, as is overwriting. The trick is finding the balance between numbers one and two. <br><br>Thanks for commenting, all!JEFritzhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03372746219262163566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post-33758460827003280672010-11-08T21:07:55.234-05:002010-11-08T21:07:55.234-05:00You've posed an interesting question. In my o...You've posed an interesting question. In my opinion, the second is more elaborate and the first is more efficient. Both are favorable for different reasons. I would consider the audience when making a decision like this. Since I write YA fiction, I sort of guide my drafts with one question: where am I going to lose them? Literary elements are definitely important, yet at the same time, reluctant teen readers hate that "crapola." Older readers would appreciate the second description more.Paul Josephhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07219724579550337686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post-71707358976544380812010-11-08T20:39:36.124-05:002010-11-08T20:39:36.124-05:00The second one is definitely better. Details are ...The second one is definitely better. <br><br>Details are hard for me to get right during the first draft. I attempted to put them in, but they're pretty dry. It's actually fun (and hard at the same time) adding them to the second draft.Melissahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15530652829980250261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1281469968333860626.post-39863117740497331232010-11-08T20:00:19.505-05:002010-11-08T20:00:19.505-05:00The second one definitely has more voice and flows...The second one definitely has more voice and flows better. I agree that it's difficult to pay attention to the descriptions, the details when you're writing the first draft. For me, the first draft is all about the plot and the characters -- it's too much to also worry about descriptions (which is my weakest point, I think).Emy Shinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08109925009902220083noreply@blogger.com